This is gud, i like it, creates a picture in your head, xx

Wow, I truly think this is YOUR style. It's like they made it just for you!!! You should try to write more poems with this format!!!

You got the imagination working all the time

keep it up!

Very nice, the 2nd line, the word, "egde" should be, "edge" Other than that very well written, short, perhaps making it longer would help.

Peace, Joe