After reading this poem through carefully I was able to get it, but through the middle it gets really confusing. There is a lot of repetition and unneeded length that takes away from the clearity of this poem. It was hard to jump and follow your ideas. Maybe if you read over it you might me able to still use discription, but condense it a bit, flowing smoothly from one idea to another, discpribing them fully so it is clear what you are trying to say. Hope I was helpful, please do not take offense.

-Tainted Mikochan

Awesome poem. good choice of words. keep on writing!