I still love you

by bon   May 2, 2006


I asked you a simple question
a long long time ago
but the answer you gave me
was a harsh, cold no

the strange thing is
or well the thing i find odd
is even though you said no
its still you that i long

even though you said no
i still love you as i did before
..wait no thats wrong
i love you even more

just because you said no
doesnt mean my heart is going to give in
but now im faced
with a difficult decision

I want to tell you i love
as it grows more with each day
but since i choose to be in silence
for now, this is all i will say
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pease tell me what you think and how i can make it sound better or well grasp the concept more..please and thank you

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  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    It seems your poem is filled with too much uncertainty. if you want to make your poem sound more powerful and make the love ring true then you have to be certain in the words you say. i found it a very sweet poem but still needs some tweaking.

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Very sweet write. I enjoyed it.

    However, this stanza -

    "the strange thing is
    or well the thing i find odd
    is even though you said no
    its still you that i long"

    It seemed to throw off the rhythm, because 'odd' and 'long' don't rhyme. Anyhow, it was a nice try.

  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Aww this is so sweet.i like it. great job!

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