Aww this is so sweet.i like it. great job!

Very sweet write. I enjoyed it.

However, this stanza -

"the strange thing is
or well the thing i find odd
is even though you said no
its still you that i long"

It seemed to throw off the rhythm, because 'odd' and 'long' don't rhyme. Anyhow, it was a nice try.

It seems your poem is filled with too much uncertainty. if you want to make your poem sound more powerful and make the love ring true then you have to be certain in the words you say. i found it a very sweet poem but still needs some tweaking.

much love and many kisses,
bex