X I Never Fell . . .

by Sole   May 2, 2006


I never fell, you dropped me,
Straight into the void
There's something you cannot see
It's fair to be annoyed

There's something I've not told you
Something better said
Worse than what I'm going through
There's more than thoughts inside my head

I never fell, you let me go,
And now I'm falling still
You have reason, that I know
The lust in which to kill

And every time I feel
Your eyes upon my skin
I know I should reveal
My secrets, held within

I never fell, I jumped
I can see that now
My dreams and morals slumped
Because I broke a vow

Some things are best left
But this is far too wrong
This friendships' petty theft
Was my fault all along

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  • 16 years ago

    by Anon

    I think these comments prove that your poem is better than mine
    Anon x

  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    I like the way the blame shifts from being the other persons fault at the ebeginning but your fault by the end, its a good way of marking the progress of the poem xx

    -biscuit-

  • 18 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    "friendships" needs an apostrophe.

    I like the theme of this poem a lot. Especially the first two lines...

    "I never fell, you dropped me,
    Straight into the void"

    It sets the tone quickly for an atypical way of portraying a typical poetic message. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Shawna

    I really like this poem too!! I'm really enjoying reading your work!! I really enjoy your style!! Great work!! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Dohr

    There's something I've not told you
    Something better said
    Worse than what I'm going through
    There's more than thoughts inside my head

    ^I feel that this stanza threw it off a bit. I understand the need to rhyme in this poem, but this stanza ruins the flow (well doesn't ruin, but close...hehe). I like the rest of it a lot. You are on my favorites... There is a lot of "hype or hipe" (however you spell it) around the site about you. I will continue to watch and see if you can keep writing at the level you are. KEEP IT UP!!!

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