This poem flows really welland has a fast thm, its very well written but theres a typo on the last line which u might mant to correct ! xx

Simple yet evocative. A really eloquent poem that benefits greatly from an easily accessible style and honest language which gives the write a really great poignancy. There is a obivous sense of desperation in the poem emphasised by the juxtaposition of the laughing, smiling and the dying and hurting. Great poem, 5/5 x

Sole i really connected with your poem, i have felt what you express in this poem, you are a talented writer.

god bless lewis

I love the way in which your wrote your poem. a question after another keeps one excited til the end with such an order and melody

Another great one!!! love this part..

"Are you hurting friend?
I never meant to strike so deep"

great work!

I almost feel there is no need for rhyme in this poem, since it doesn't help the flow. Could have had more meaning without the rhyme. Still, a well structured poem. Nice write!

Awww!!! I loved this! Wow you seem like a great friend! I loved the last stanza and this one "Are you hurting friend?
I never meant to strike so deep"

Truely Amasing, i love reading your work.

--Steph

Great poem!! I love the writing style!! I loved it all!! 5/5

Yet again this was also very sweet, I as I'm sure many people can relate to this all too well. it had a great concept to it it is the best one I have read so far! good job

Chanelle--

Woh. This poem has really sent shivers down my spine. I love it, it is so powerfully written, the layout is great, and I love the way you have rhymed it. I don't know what to say, I love it and I think you are a great poet from what I've read! 5/5
- Polly