I really loved the style of this poem, the slightly irregular rhyming pattern gives a rather disjointed slant which emphasises the slightly obscure tone of the poem. Although designed to be an expression of feeling the poem gives little away whilst telling the reader exactly what you want. I particularly liked the 3rd stanza where the use of couplets gives the poem a really snappy feel. Great write, 5/5 x

Thats very short and sweet!,

it fitted beauitfully
well done
dave x

Thats very short and sweet!,

it fitted beauitfully
well done
dave x