Its good, for your first, but you repeated i miss you, it was too close together for my liking. It was still pretty cool
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Fpr a first time poem, it was okay. Keep working on it. Using "miss you" two times in a row kind of throws off your rhyme scheme, but it's pretty good.

Short and sweet.

Did you mean "remember" in the last line?

this is good, I hope you keep writing. I look forward to more work.

Car

Beautiful poem.Loads of emotions.
I agree that you shouldn't have put
"I love you and will miss you,
and will always miss you."
It messes up the flow,but still a great poem.
5/5, Miranda