Sweet Symphony of You

by MemoirsOfMe   May 2, 2006


How can I not remember
What happened yesterday
Because its still vivid in my mind
Just tangled in this disarray

The pain tomorrow brings
Is painted on my forehead
I cannot even fathom
Where the next day heads

Its unstoppable,
Imaginable, yet distant
Mischievious and forgotten
Me, unexistant.

Can you simply wave this away?
No, I won't let you.
Your pain is my pain
Its time you felt it too.

Try to cease my heartbreak
I just might give you one more chance
Though I only hope to give
My last victory dance

But one thing is sure,
Just lingering in the air,
That you, my father,
And you must beware

For what comes around comes around
What goes up must come down again
And I'm welcoming the sweet symphony
Of your everlasting pain.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I agree about the one stanza, otherwise it's thought out pretty decent. I didn't stumble over your words.

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I absolutely loved this poem!
    It was so good. It was very emotional and deep. This one was also very discrptive. You are an amazing poet! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Fighter (Ariane L.)

    The last stanza is ace!! so deep and sad, yet beautiful. stay strong and take care,
    -xXx-

  • 18 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Excellent job. I really like this. Especially this part:

    For what comes around comes around
    What goes up must come down again

    That saying is so true. Great job. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen Angel

    Let me start by saying I really liked this poem and I gave it 5/5, which is why, if I can, I'd like to help you improve it. I have to agree with Elijah the rhyme in the second stanza does seem a little forced; maybe you could try to rearrange the lines a little as sometimes this can help you to see a new way of working the ideas without having to push the rhyme scheme...Your use of rhyme was really very good throughout but just remember you don't have to be a slave to your own devices. I especially liked the third stanza personally, the use of enjambment gave it a really snappy feel. Great write! x

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