Wonderful poem. So sad and so powerful, a great job at expressing yourself. You have an amazing talent. Keep up the good work. I hope everything works out for you one day.

I wanted to pick my favourite part of your poem, but it was filled with several great parts. The third stanza really caught my eye. It's very deep and emotional and your use of langauge is skilled making it a pleasure to read. 5/5

Let me start by saying I really liked this poem and I gave it 5/5, which is why, if I can, I'd like to help you improve it. I have to agree with Elijah the rhyme in the second stanza does seem a little forced; maybe you could try to rearrange the lines a little as sometimes this can help you to see a new way of working the ideas without having to push the rhyme scheme...Your use of rhyme was really very good throughout but just remember you don't have to be a slave to your own devices. I especially liked the third stanza personally, the use of enjambment gave it a really snappy feel. Great write! x

Excellent job. I really like this. Especially this part:

For what comes around comes around
What goes up must come down again

That saying is so true. Great job. 5/5

The last stanza is ace!! so deep and sad, yet beautiful. stay strong and take care,
-xXx-

I absolutely loved this poem!
It was so good. It was very emotional and deep. This one was also very discrptive. You are an amazing poet! 5/5

I agree about the one stanza, otherwise it's thought out pretty decent. I didn't stumble over your words.