*takes a step back*...that was a truely amazing poem...*opens mouth (closes it again)* I'm really not sure what else I can say, genuinely left me speechless...Just the inspired use of enjambment and slanted rhyme which gives it such a unique and fractured feel whilst allowing it to flow smoothly from line to line and the brilliant imagery, beauty always tainted, and the final stanza which just completes the poem tying together the idea of cancer introduced in the first line by referring to virus...insidious and deadly. Beautiful (is that the right word though...=P) Just an amazing piece 5/5 x

I hope to learn from you.
you have such talent and knowledge.
i hope you find somewhere to use this talent for some kind of gain other then pleasure.
~Emah
5/5

Very deep.
I can feel the power of the words.
kind of confused on the message but the writing is great.
another good poem

keep it up

5/5

chris