Tis peice is fantastic. the structure is perfect like in all your peaices and the rhymes and flow brilliantly composed. the plot is clear and well written.

1 point though i think there may be a slight typo in the 2nd to last line. other than that though brilliant peice, i esspessially like the ending as it gives a slight idea of hope in an otherwise very sad peice.

5/5

Great poem girl.

Thankyou!! And I'll fix the typo. much love