This is really descriptive and deep. I like it. Good use of words and rhymes. Lurve it!

--Mz Tinkerbellz

This is really good! It's got a great rhyme scheme.. great flow.. & it's very descriptive. Great job on this! 5/5***

By more structured, what do you mean?

Oh, ok. i'll try and work on it on my other poems. thanx for the advice. i appreciate it!