Wow, you do have a way with words! I liked how you intertwine humans and machines, in particular this line "when you cry you rust." I thought this line was particulary (I can't spell today...actually that may be right I just don't know) unique and really brought the meaning out in this piece. Nice nice work :)

"people forced into deception" -- amazing, spectacular, words cannot describe. I bow to you.

Wow! Short but so effective!!! These lines are amazingly written and very deep: "A place where \"when you cry you rust\", "Where the goal is perfection
and perfection is nothing,
putting all the effort into a blank page."
5/5, almost perfect piece.