I love narrative poetry- and i love this poem- i think its creative and really good

Wow...very sad...but i loved the meaning!....very expressive! nice job
~*Linz*~

I liked it, you got th epoint of the poem across and the flow was amazing. (Sorry if my comments are getting shorter, I have a rather badly hurt hand and it hurts to type, so I am just leaving basics and not long drawn out comments, such as this one)

Not too sure about this one. the mesaage isnt too clear and it seems to be a bit slap-dash. the rhyming is good but i think this could do with a bit of work to straighten it out.

-biscuit-

Oh wow. This one made tears come to my eyes. it reminded me of when my grandmother died. Only I was there. But for most of the time she was in the hospital, I was home alone. I remember getting calls from my mom every hour telling me that she was getting worse by the minute. I love this one. You've inspired me. =]