Damn Darien... This is magical. Your words are so beautiful. I hope she comes back to you soon :) A very nice write!!

Fantastic poem

Aww.. thats so sweet! i love this bit the best! ::

"I'll blow you a dozen kisses,
and send them with the wind.
Home they go, upon your lips,
as they leave my fingertips."

itz sooo cuutee! :))
keep it up!
jessy

Heyy.. thnxx for the advice :) havin problems with this one friend acutally.. lol.. not exactly seein eye to eye at the moment.. :P newayz.. once again, great poem!
jessy

Your words are very beautiful and they present a really nice, and vivid imagery. Everything didn't feel forced, it was really magical, but I did think you could have maybe changed this part a bit:
or like a prisoner behind bars.
Could be something like, "A prison behind bars." Could be, "Or a prisoner behind bars." but it's really up to you.

Your use of words were excellent! It all flowed very nicely. There was so much great emotion in it. It was so sad, but it held a lot of love in it. You are really talented. 5/5
Cayce

Simply beautiful!! so much romance and powerfull words in it ! i loved it, just like your other poem! ur an amazing poet, keep writing! 5/5

~StefQ

Aww how adorable, I miss you the best w/ur new love. What a sweet poem!!! good job!

This verse is absolutly beautiful Darien

I'll blow you a dozen kisses,
and send them with the wind.
Home they go, upon your lips,
as they leave my fingertips.

Such a beautiful way to start the poem, you have a wonderful way with words and it captivates the reader. Really touched by this poem lovely job.

Take care, Lise

It's been a while since I've read any of your poetry...I know I should come by more often. Some times the real world doesn't allow me to be on here as much as I'd like...anyway - I love this poem! Awesome write! So fulll of emotion and heartfelt...I LOVED the first stanza...that was a great way to start this poem out...missing a special someone can be torture...nicely done Darien!!

Great poem my friend....
It made me think about lots of things.... I guess I'm waiting for a day like that too. Take care.... hugs!

"I'll blow you a dozen kisses,
and send them with the wind.
Home they go, upon your lips,
as they leave my fingertips."

This is my favorite stanza!!! It was so beautifully written!!! Your a fantastic writer!! Awesome love poem!!! 5/5!!

2 of your stanzas had 6 lines rather than 4 so that kind of threw me off. But I liked your poem a lot. It's obvious you put lots of emotiond into writing it.

The flowers I hold are healthy,
my tears will keep them strong.
Walking on land, swimming at sea,
Tidal waves could never stop me.
I would sail across the ocean,
so I can show you my devotion.

Great job!! I enjoyed it alot Darien!!

Omg. This is so goood! I loved it. My fav part is;
"The flowers I hold are healthy,
my tears will keep them strong.
Walking on land, swimming at sea,
Tidal waves could never stop me.
I would sail across the ocean,
so I can show you my devotion."
An by placing it in the middle made the poem itself really powerful. The flow and rhyming were good, and you kept me interested all the way through. An awesome poem! 5/5

`taleeee xx

This is a really heart touching piece of poetry,full of emotion, you have got a great talent,
top marks

Wow excellent poem. I can really relate this poem to myself. The person I really care about, I have to wait a couple YEARS for them. So yeah. I can really relate to this poem.

I really like this part:

I need you here more than ever,
like the plants need the rain.
I'm like the night without stars,
or like a prisoner behind bars.

This poem deserves a 5 and that is what I gave you :)

Firstly, let me say I liked the format of this, it's quite different, especially with the abcc(dd) rhyming scheme.
It was quite a lovely write, with some nice descriptions especially in the first couple of stanzas.
The rhyme in the 8th stanza could have been better in my opinion though.
Well done overall.

0mg darl i hvnt heard fr0m u in ages. this was beautiful as per usual always l0ved reading ur p0ems. ggreat j0b captured every em0ti0n in this. keep it up xx

Wow, awesome write. I loved it. So much emotion within, the flow was great. I am sure there are alot of people that can relate to this poem. Good Job!!!

Peace, Joe