Wow, the structer was really interesting but really good. dang, i wish i could write like you! really outstanding! 5/5

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Personally I don't like this rhyme scheme, but with that aside, it is a great poem. Well written, simple with a good balance of emotion. Again, this may be an accent thing, but here and there don't rhyme :)

I have to say, I have fallen in love with your love poems. They are just so blissful in the act of love and how you express it is just beautiful. The way you percieve and express these situations is divine. I liked this poem, and I like how it all came together at the end. Great Job!

Aww, Very passionate poem---- Your word choice makes the poem so strong and filled with emotion---I really enjoyed reading it! 5/5