Let it be

You've got a good idea for the poem, a nice line of what you wanna say and how you wanna say it, but you should probably read over it a few times. There's a few spelling errors. First one right away...

The thought of losing you
makes me shiver with fear
it makes me wonder how fate ever pulled us together
how my heart excepted you so near

"excepted" is either accepted, or expected. or except, but the latter isnt probably a good fit fo what you're trying to say.

Also you should stray from writing different length lines. The rhythm is key in a poem, you know how people say 90% of the words you say, mean nothing, its HOW you say them or how you phrase them. That's how poetry is. If you keep a nice rhyme and you keep the flow tightly fit and doesnt lengthen with each line I believe this poem could be spectacular. For instance:

Yours:
was it an angel telling me its my time?
or just that little voice inside?
if so why does it make me feel as tho
i have already died?

A little edit:
was it an angel telling me its my time?
or maybe that little voice inside?
if so why does it make me feel as tho,
a part of me has already died?

Another thing is punctuation. Music can get away with making 4 words last as long as a previous 26, but if you want a pause in your poetry a good way to utilize that is with good old grammer and punctuation. I'm not going to rate this because this poem has a lot of potential and I want to see you tap into it :)

not bad though, but dig deep for that raw emotion and the words will come.

Thus poem is beautiful... But like ur saying or as i see ur trying to say sometimes love is saying goodbye.