That was cool if a little...unsmooth with the flow sometimes. Still it was cool and strangely different than some I've seen.
~Fallen

Beautifully writin hun! :) i lykd it alot
luv alwyz
X-Fallen Angel-X

Beautiful. i loved reading this, it was very kool : )

You made the poem your own, your words, your descriptions, and not just some mock of everyday teen drama. Keep standing out with your writing.