I'm the one..

This is a really sad poem, and it seems like something is bothering you. If you have any problems and need someone to talk to, private message me :) I'll be happy to help.

WOW!! THAT WAS COOL AND AMAZING!! *kisses her lips passionately* I love you hunni

Fabulous. Really dark and heartfelt. You kept this one short and I think this worked well in this case. The poem had a very strong rhythm and showed a very clear discontent. The last line I thought was a little out, I think it would scan better if you changed it so that it read:
"Singing this sad song" Great stuff though, 5/5 x

Arrrrrh hun so much emotion in this piece. i hop you arr thank you so much for you comments.

luv gema
xoxox

Short and sad. It was weird reading and hearing it from the first person perspective. Enhanced the reality...awakened the sadness...brill...

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