Another perfect poem, if ya ever wanna talk, send an e-mail to me and its cool, cus i like just talken bout stuff.

Thats a sad but strong poem... well done.

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Jacs
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Wow. That was so powerful, so full of emotion. Great Write.

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I loved it another great one so awesome

Very touching, no wonder so many people have commented its great yet sad as well.

kaza

That poem was so well written. It had such a sad story behind it. Another excellent job.

Hey thanx sooo much 4 ur comment, and yer u r rite both timez,
anyway great poem, i couldnt do better if i tried!lol, luv ya and thanx you lots and lots
mel

Great poem! The sorrow behind your words were portrayed so powerfully throughout the work, it was really well written and sad. Keep it up! 5/5

Beautifully written, sad poem. I really like the effort put into this poem to weave it out as a story. Nice job.
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As always~ Kate

Honestly, I am amazed! This is so powerful & emotion filled. You have such a gift with words. I loved this.

Ally. x

Woah, this is way farfetched, but yet, it makes you think. i suggest that maybe building up to the climax, because it kinda fell from the point of where you said the little girl died. maybe go into detail about how the person felt guilty, or something. thats just my opinion. but this was really good, and gave me the chills!! keep it up! :]

Sad,good, and interesting

Oh my gosh! That was absolutely amazing hun. I loved it. I know that feeling all to well, I loved the power that came out with every word that you wrote. It was amazing. I know I already said that, but I loved it. I literally was imagining a girl coming to me, and that happening. Your description in all of it was wonderful.

The was a slap of pure reality!
The last line was a deep punch for me.
It so bittersweet...poeple really do feel like that.