Your poem is really long but it really does grab the reader's attention. Not lying, I rarely read long poems if the opening stanza isn't strong enough but yours was very hooking. I really liked the repition and how people still accuse someone of lying, even if they were drinking doesn't make it right to brand them as a "Liar." Your poems are really strong and I really do wish you well with writing.

A top poem, inspired by a top song. "But the past must be bottled and labelled with love"... A great change to the line from the song. A lot of other words from the song are mixed around and made to be such a fantastic poem. I much enjoyed this one, a sad and haunting write about one's life as an acoholic. A very good piece Katie... :)

This is absolutly amazing.
Keep up the good work :]

This was a very good piece, and also a good song to inspire you. You did a very good job using the ideas of the song in your poem. Well done Katie.

I had a long time to visit this site...well I always loved your poems..this one's excellent too!really really great.The concept,the rhyming,everything is great

This is amazing, Katie. It so sad. The story it tells is incredible. I am awestruck. Great job!!

Aww this is so sad! Nicely written though!

Sad what alcohol can do to ppl hey?? Sad what trauma can do to ppl. Love what you have done here. Speaks volumes and incorporates alot of realistic issues. Very nicely done.

Godbless
Sammib

I don't really get the "He died like an alcoholic" line. I'd already assumed by this point that he WAS an alcoholic at this stage. No?

Sorry, forgot to add that I thought it was good. How rude of me!

AWESOME!1 this poem is sad. i hate to know that sometimes people do turn out that way. alone and left to die. well good poem.xoxo