Wow such a dark poem Dave, the flow of the words was absolutley fantastic.....I loved it so I gave it a 5. Let us see what else you got in that mind of yours lol....cant wait.

Take care, lis

Thanks Lisa! ..... Dave.

Unusual. The word choice was especially cool. Very interesting content. The flow...strong yet not overbearing. Hmm...not exactly a favorite but very interesting write.
~Fallen

Thanks "Grace" its really useful getting feedback on my writing!

All the best
Dave.

Great piece of writing! the rhyme is rather unusual and the flow is great through the poem.

thank you very much for your comments on my work.

good luck and peace
shobhana

Another great one David, its really nice to get refreshing views of things insane..lol. Thanx, Tim