Awe I love how you called the rain the angels tear drops! This is so sweet yet so sad! You used such different disscriptions that really made me like this poem! Keep up the awesome writting

I liked this poem a lot. But the last stanza

Now this young sweet little girl is buried six feet under,
In a dark little coffin made of beautiful lumber.
He left us burdened with this pain.
Seen in the angels tear drops we call rain.

I dont know, reading that stanza I thought you could of renamed the poem, and it wouldve become stronger. Still great poem, 5/5

Bryce

Great peice, the plot is wwell told and very clear and the descriptions well used. it is very powerfully written, the end espessially has a lot of power to it and finishes the peice off well

That poor girl and i felt her pain, just one question, does this in anyway relate to you or someone you know?

Awww! Thats such a sad sad poem! I loved the description in it. Its very powerful! Keep writing! xx

Aww wow soo sad. but you did a wonderful job writing it. is this based on something that really happened? anyway great job. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

I like it, there are a few things I think could have made it a better and more emotional read, such as the line "

Her spirit gone has left no presence"

you could play with this a little bit, as I think this line in particular is and can be quite powerful. for example;

Her spirit gone, left no presence
Her spirit, gone, has left no presence

though all in all, great poem, enjoyed the read.