I liked it. It had a lot of emotion in it, but it didn't flow that great in someplaces. It was still really good though! Keep up the good work!

I really liked this alot. Losing someones trust is one of the worst feelings in the world. And you did a really great job on expressing that. But by the sounds of this poem, You deserve it back. Hope everything goes well =]

5/5 It was awesome! =] Keep it up!

`taleee xx

Wow this poem is very deep & emotional. You did a great job at expressing your feelings in this & it really touched my heart. Great job on this!

Heyy i really like this poem, your an awesome writer :) wonderful job!!!!

Haunting poem. More of a narrative but the emotions were there and I can sense some confusion but that might just be me.

Lovely structure this poem...flowed like a stream of thoughts...it jumped about and had a varied pace...and the content in itself was very very sad. I like the irony in the last line, I got the impression in the midst of it all there was anything but comprehension...which made it even sadder.

Super poem.

[lost_laureate - come find me]

I like this you've definitely made the effort to portray a deep emotion just perfect your rhyme scheme and it would be perfect

Sondos

I love this poem. It's descriptive yet very sad. The flow and everything that I like in a good poem was there. Keep up the good work Hun.

Hey! i havent been on this site in forever, but u left me a cmment a lng time ago and i just wanted to say thanx!! it means alot...

&& btw this is rly good.... i hate my dad...