Dont complain when you are alive....

by ~*~Morgan~*~   May 9, 2006


Before you get mad-
And throw a fit
For the things you don't have
And what you don't get

Think of the people overseas-
The ones begging for food, down on their knees
Think of the men-
Fighting for us, Losing their lives
To bring this war to an end

They don't ask for much
Just to pray for them-
Show your patriotism, and such...
So the next time you argue with a family or friend-
Think of the ones who may never see theirs again

Spacing doesn't really add up , but i think i get my point across

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  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Morgan --
    Unfortunately, I had to dock this poem quite a bit. The force was absolutely terrible ;; as was the rhyming. You DEFINITELY have some work to do on this. And again with the capital 'I'`s. I guess you made your point, but, if you want people to take you seriously -- you`re going to have to do better than this. 3/5.

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

  • 18 years ago

    by oldthings

    You do. and tis a good point indeed. I agree. Good message and even with the spacing not being perfect it still flowed fairly well. so good poem. =)

  • 18 years ago

    by Katie

    My dads military so ive lived the life. love it, and im glad your aware and appreciative. thanks, good work

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wooww.. this had an extremely strong message and it was so true! keep up the amazing work! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    A strong message in this peice wich is well expressed. the flow is a little rough in areas and the structure isn't perfect but it defantly gets your point across well with some well written content.

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