Promises Becomes the Lies

by Momentary Relapse   May 9, 2006


The air is thick with the lies you spoke
Each promise made is one you broke
The time has come the time will end
Those thoughts you keep shall one day bend
Choking gasps falls into despair
You tore apart what truth you gave
The pain receives its own due care
The lives of many you refuse to save

Each lie was slowly given its own life
Blithely you ignore all of this strife
The pain of what has been known
Regret the truth with wings has flown
Pointless within lives all this pain
Every lie you have spoken reapears
Driving home the lessons of insane
The promise broken leaves the tears

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  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    I love this poem, its very sad and heartfelt!
    thanks for your comment on mine...I guess I needed your criticism =) thanks.

    about the poem, well, my english isn't perfect but I like the poem overall, it meant something to me.
    just check the grammar mistake in the title "Promises BecomeS the lies". shouldn't it be "Promises Become The Lies"

    other than that, the poem is really sweet, well written
    Keep it up
    Yours
    NemO x0x0x0x0

  • 18 years ago

    by Nicholas Kerst

    Great poem...it gives some good imagery...its almost like my most recent...this poem might be among your top 5...i like the changing of rhyming patterns...and the rhyming for that fact

    --S-S--

  • 18 years ago

    by :.:.:LostRegret:.:.:

    "Each lie was slowly given its own life
    Blithely you ignore all of this strife"
    I absolutely loved the way you wrote that. Your poem was so pensive I wonder if you wrote that from experience. If so I apologize. -Regret

  • 18 years ago

    by LiL K

    Wow, this is a really deep poem truly written from the heart. I love how you write two couplets and then an ABAB stanza...that was unique.

    My favorite lines are..

    "Choking gasps falls into despair
    You tore apart what truth you gave"

    Very powerful and well-written! 5/5

    *~:thanks for your comment btw:~*

  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I love the beat and the word choice. This poem is amazing. keep it up.

    Lissa

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