I miss you more than ill admit

Really a great poem but something is missing. I didn't get into the feeling. It seems like you miss this person but life continues, not more or less but overall it a great poem.

Beautifully penned poem. So much emotion is in it and you express it pretty well... Some suggestions are to work on the flow and to include deeper feelings so that readers can also feel what you do. That last stanza is really powerful... idk what you think but i might re-write it to say: I miss you, I love you, but I hate you so much.... That is a more negative tone to it though, so you might not want to do that---Amazing job overall! Keep it up!

xxEvilAngelxx

Mmmm......good storyline and thoughts behind this poem and I feel the same way about my dad in my life. I say I hate him but I guess in a way that's just my way of covering my way of saying I miss him. Well, this poem was good but it could be better if you could get the flow better.

Good job! 5/5

Innoc3ntStar

Hmm, I agree with Kaylee and Nat.
This was indeed a venting poem. It's good to let your emotions flow into a poem, but you need to control them too. But keep on trying.

Like Kaylee said. It seems more of a venting poem. Which is good to me. I like venting poems.

If you did want to make it better. You could maybe add a little more to it. Explain a bit more WHY you hate, love, miss this person. Just dig a little deeper into your emotions. Good job though. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

P.S. If you're wondering why I did this one and not Black tears. It's because I've already done it.

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