by Kaylee
It's really an emotion poem but it felt more like a vent more than anything. If this is true then please by all means vent in your own style (this) but if it's a poem then try and add more detail so we, the reader, can feel this pome just as you, the writer, felt when writing it. |
by Natalie
Like Kaylee said. It seems more of a venting poem. Which is good to me. I like venting poems. |
by Darien
Hmm, I agree with Kaylee and Nat. |
by Stephanie
Mmmm......good storyline and thoughts behind this poem and I feel the same way about my dad in my life. I say I hate him but I guess in a way that's just my way of covering my way of saying I miss him. Well, this poem was good but it could be better if you could get the flow better. |
Beautifully penned poem. So much emotion is in it and you express it pretty well... Some suggestions are to work on the flow and to include deeper feelings so that readers can also feel what you do. That last stanza is really powerful... idk what you think but i might re-write it to say: I miss you, I love you, but I hate you so much.... That is a more negative tone to it though, so you might not want to do that---Amazing job overall! Keep it up! |
by kelleyana
Really a great poem but something is missing. I didn't get into the feeling. It seems like you miss this person but life continues, not more or less but overall it a great poem. |