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Wowy. That was really good. I really liked these lines:
"Dancing so far apart
But then he pulled my close to him
I could feel the beating of his heart"

The poem was so beautiful, And you expressed it so well. The flow was okay, And the rhyming was good. Annnd, I really liked it. It was sweet. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee xx

Aww.. this poem was so sweet.. the emotions were really clear and the descriptions were good.. i also loved how it was kinda like a storyy.. :)

But then he pulled my close to him
^ here, it should be "me" not "my" i think..

And the color of my eyes had dimed
^ here, i think it should be "dimmed" not "dimed"

He's given me something amazing
Taught me how to live
No matter how we end up
He had something amazing to give
^ here, i think you shouldn't use the word amazing twice as it kind of ruins the effect!

nice work, really enjoyed this write! 5/5

Wow........that is one awsome poem...really liked it and hope to read more
Jennifer

Awesome! It was really good. Keep up the good work. 5/5 xxxxxxx Help Me