Your flow in all your poems is amazing it really makes you wanna to read more and keep reading you have a good gift dont ever stop. 5.5

I love you atyle of writing it is very unique...great job...
Emma 5/5
ps...just to let you know i just add you to my favorites list...=)

"Birds were playing in the trees,
while I walked the lonely streets.
Every step I took got me closer,
to the arms of my beautiful sweets."
for some reason I felt like using the plural for 'sweet' was only to maintain the rhyme, and would more correctly be 'sweet', unless 'sweet' not only refers to your love leaving but your friend arriving.

I thought that the way you warped some of the lines to fit the rhyme scheme was entertaining, and I don't really think it detracted from the flow of the poem.

Lol thats tight
TTYL
>>MIA

I like this poem. It has an innocent cheerfullness to it :) In a few places the rhythm seemed a little bit off, but still a very good poem

Nice

WOW thats not good losing your cell in a time like this :S but anyways it's a beautiful peom and it means more then just a warning for poeple to alway watch out that they dont lose their cell :p lol
anyways this poem also deserves a 5/5

~StefQ

Liked it a lot and it was very different! Good job! 5/5 Keep up the good work! Thx for commenting on my poems!

-Stephanie-

I like the story to it goes through the day. it makes a change to hears a happy peom for once cause all mine i right are sad. 4/5 is this story true? did u find ya phone?You should write a poem about the next day

Hehe.. that was interesting.. i didn't really get the phone bit though, lol! good write, it had good descriptions, and flowed well! 4/5

Nice....loved it too
Jennifer

I loved this poem, it was very true and awesomely portrayed. I love how there was a slight change in the tone towards the end of the poem. Beautiful and simple finish. Keep it up! 5/5

God I think taht your poetry is totally awesome This is it I am adding you as a fav! Ithink that your great this poem was great and really spoken form the heart! Tell me how do you get so many ppl to read and rate your stuff????

God I think taht your poetry is totally awesome This is it I am adding you as a fav! Ithink that your great this poem was great and really spoken form the heart! Tell me how do you get so many ppl to read and rate your stuff????

Good poem...you can relate to the ups and downs in life for sure, It's neat that you could include/link it all together so well!! keep writing!

Good work. I can relate to this poem. I think everyone has those days.

Once again i loved itttttttttt....It was kind of sad, but well, i dont really know what to say except you are fabulous!! 5/5

I liked this line:
"A sense of joy surrounds me,
while singing to the shower head"
very nice.

the rhyme of new and food was a bit forced, but the rest well done

a very nice way of sharing a day in your life

Ruby

Great way to make something so simple, so exciting! great job again!

This is a good poem, I don't know if I've ever read a poem about someone losing their cell phone. LOL :-) You have a different writing style!! Good job.