Such a different poem! It was perfect! I loved how you ended it, so sad yet such a perfect ending! I can never get enough of your work hon! Your an amazing poet!

Oh my goshh this was very good.

Awww...u can write such sad poems! :( but they r sooo nice:)

YOU IDIOT!! you made me sad again:D gush!!its VERY nice poem but jessy....you know your heart is locked...well my heart is locked too and u two guyz have the keys!!so think about it...and you screamed at me two times for no freaking reason:( you dont LIKE ME ANYMORE!! but i do...

What an intriguing concept!! I like the idea but felt that the poem was drawn out a bit too long...as if you were running out ideas. But this is sweetly written and ever so cute....

Tres Bien

[lost_laureate]

And I am stopping for now because of a lack of time and other stuff...I will still probably comment and I am not gonna stop writing (:O))...just putting them up I guess..I'm not very good anyway....nice stuff...

*runs*

Aw.. i loved that! It was so good. & I could definitely relate to it. My favorite stanza was:
But my mind
Has no place
In this fragile decision
It merely watches
As my heart
Makes the same mistake
Over and over again..
Great job on this! I loved it!

I love this poem, it's beautiful. It really describes how love makes you give your heart to one person, and even though you want to do something, you can't help it.

Good job.
5/5

I cried when i read this... i have a deep connection to your poetry and it just.. touches me... because this describes me right to the very tippest of a point. Your poem is me... its all so.. wow. If they are true to your life then i can honestly say i know exactly what your going through. I love it along with all of your poems, your a natural born writer. poet. 5/5/5/5/5 Much Love, -Jen-

PS. Just tell me if you want me to read any others... id be happy to :)

I have come to realise that there is another girl on here that comments to you and her name is Jen..just like me..It's becoming very confusing! lol
Anyway I loved this poem..I can totally relate to it!! Im amazed that your 13 and can write like this!!

Jen

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I loved the way u put the words togeter n just made it bloom! grate job!