Living To Die..

by Luke   May 10, 2006


Shallow graves..
2 hearts deep..
The sinking feeling..
Starts the creep..

The endless shadow..
The endless tears..
The back wards step..
Through all these years..

This is reality..
That dawns like a brick..
That hits you hard..
And there's it'll stick..

This is fear..
Like no other..
It's in your ear..
Like a nagging mother..

This constant grind..
This constant move..
This edge to wards death..
With something to prove..

This is our target..
One last stand..
Dieing in the place..
The wind makes you land..

We're just living...
Living to die..
Thinking about this..
Sure makes me cry.

(c) Of Luke 10th May 2006

Yes.. this is my First poem in well over 2 months..

Sorry for the people that miss me.. But I don't know.. life's just too hectic atm.

I love you all sooo much and miss you greatly!

Love Luke.

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  • 18 years ago

    by WakingFreedom

    Wow, that was lovelyful.....i dont know what lovelyful means....but its my new word....hehe
    ~Evil Penguin~ P.S. Chickens Moo

  • 18 years ago

    by pseudo

    Amazing poem.. very enjoyable to read keeps the reader really interested. Also it amazes me how you use so few words but they give such a strong feelings and a powerful message. Truly brilliant! =)

    --emotionless.19*

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Good to have you back and kickin butt Luke. This was a great poem, and you don't look out of shape at all. Still as top notch as ever.

    "It's in your ear..
    Like a nagging mother.."

    That was the only line I didnt like. The first part to it started off really good, and then that line popped in. It's not horrible, but I thought it messed up the flow. But still a great job man!

  • 18 years ago

    by Eibutsina

    Sad, true but an enjoyable read I got a bit confused with your choice of language at some stages and had to read some stanzas a few time to grasp a proper understanding. Still was a good write for a poet getting slowly back into it :o)

  • 18 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Luke... It sure is good to see some of your work again. We all miss you. We hope that things get better for you soon :) Chin up, my friend.

    This is a great write, the flow as always is brilliant and the rhyme is perfect. A sad subject you've touched on here.

    Couple of things...
    2nd stanza:
    "The back wards step.."
    ^^ Backwards (no space)

    3rd stanza:
    "And there's it'll stick.."
    There should be no "'s" on the end of "there"

    5th stanza:
    "This edge to wards death.."
    Again no space in "towards"

    You always impress me with your choice of subject and your words are always perfectly chosen.

    Take care my friend, hope to see you soon!