Luke... It sure is good to see some of your work again. We all miss you. We hope that things get better for you soon :) Chin up, my friend.

This is a great write, the flow as always is brilliant and the rhyme is perfect. A sad subject you've touched on here.

Couple of things...
2nd stanza:
"The back wards step.."
^^ Backwards (no space)

3rd stanza:
"And there's it'll stick.."
There should be no "'s" on the end of "there"

5th stanza:
"This edge to wards death.."
Again no space in "towards"

You always impress me with your choice of subject and your words are always perfectly chosen.

Take care my friend, hope to see you soon!

Sad, true but an enjoyable read I got a bit confused with your choice of language at some stages and had to read some stanzas a few time to grasp a proper understanding. Still was a good write for a poet getting slowly back into it :o)

Good to have you back and kickin butt Luke. This was a great poem, and you don't look out of shape at all. Still as top notch as ever.

"It's in your ear..
Like a nagging mother.."

That was the only line I didnt like. The first part to it started off really good, and then that line popped in. It's not horrible, but I thought it messed up the flow. But still a great job man!

Amazing poem.. very enjoyable to read keeps the reader really interested. Also it amazes me how you use so few words but they give such a strong feelings and a powerful message. Truly brilliant! =)

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Wow, that was lovelyful.....i dont know what lovelyful means....but its my new word....hehe
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