Comments : Tell me No Lies

  • 18 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Very nice poem, the main idea and your word ussage was great. Just one idea, the use of the word "Me" was used to much in your poem and it through off the flow, such as here

    Never lie to me, lies only hurt me more,

    You could say "Never like to me, lies only hurt more' The flow would be much easier to read... Other than that little detail your work is really good! and this poem gets a well deserved 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by The Angel of Secrets

    Excellent written, I like the Never lie to me, lies only hurt me more. It works great