Trance

by LadyPearl   May 10, 2006


Sunny and bright
Not like my heart
Warm, soothing air
unlike my thoughts
Set in a frown
Heartless and cold
Unspoken words
Stolen and sold

Glossy eyes gleam
Staring at time
When will you stop
When till you're mine
Down and depressed
Knowing that's wrong
But I couldn't care less
Just tagging along

Breathe, I say breathe
Smile, I cannot
Peace, come to me
Still yet I fought
Day seems to pause
With no regards
To me, or how I feel
Just let it discard

Trance, unmoving
Unfeeling at all
Losing sight
Of who we are
This is what stress
Seems to do
This is how slowly
It kills you

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  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    I loved this poem...I thoguht you had some great word choices and amazing flow...I just loved it...
    Emma 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley Van Eperen

    Wow. this poem is soo...deep. i love this poem, its just great. ur an amazing writer keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. this is really good! The short lines really gave it more depth & emphasis & brought out the emotions. I love the way that you described everything, & I especially like the way that you ended it. Great job on this!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    That was very good! verry powerful.. the sadness just comes rising out of your poem and hits you straight in the face! i love your work! keep it up!
    jessy

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen Angel

    Really powerful poem, the feeling comes straight through. What stood out for me was the way that the flow seemed to slow and die towards the end of the poem; maybe it was just the way I read it but I thought that it made the ending very effective. I also liked the almost frustration that comes through ths write very good stuff. I think it was mentioned above; the rhyme was excellent and never seemed close to being forced. Fantastic, 5/5 x

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