A very good poem and I loved the way you used pranthiese at the end of some lines to show the girls emotion it was wonderful

Eerie and more the well done. I love the description of her:

Straight-cut hair, no split ends
Contact lenses, perfect friends
A curved, thin body, manicured nails
Sure of every step, no desire to fail

Straight A grades (studies every night)
Fragile and cute (doesn't know how to fight)
Neat handwriting (but no creativity)
Striving to be best (gets 4 hours of sleep)

Its funny because I can relate to some like the lck of sleep but others its things I see in others =] i dunno I love that you attacked our views on *prefect* people. well done =]

And I believe that today is your birthday so......

HAPPY BDAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
*sings and hands you a cake*

love Jenn

I can relate to trying to be perfect and stuff.. like the perfect body and hiding from parents and crying inside and stuff.and the cutting . so most of it i can relate to.. well this is a very sad poem.. its goood but very sad to me.. i like how u wrote it tho. keep on writing u have alot of talent
take care
luve angie