This is amazing
i could not find one flaw

i love it your such a good writer

*hugs*
5/5

This is really good! keep upt the good work!
Ashley

Beautifully done. I love how you paint the picture in your reader's mind. This poem reminds me of "The Stone Angel" by Margaret Atwood... no relation, just the title. Great write. 5/5

This was just amazing. I loved it. The way you ended it, Was awesome! && I really liked the first stanza, I thought it was really well done. The rhyme scheme and flow were good, I don't think theres any falts in this piece. Keep it up! 5/5

`taleee xx

Awesome poem. I really liked the style in this one. Using different lines giving it a mixture of emotions. Great job on this one.

I'm guessing this doll was yours? The only thing I would say is to try to keep syllables to a similar number throughout. It will help it flow better. Other than that, it's a fine poem, and a better idea.
Daniel

Wow.. that was truly amazing.. there was not ONE single thing wrong with it! it was just perfect! keep up the excellent work! 5/5
jessy

Awesome poem doll! Do you know what's weird as hell? I wrote a poem about an old man on this site two years ago. So similar to yours. Here, read this:

"The old man dwells in his chair
Gazing out through the still air
His memories are all that the man has
His years past
there is nothing left to plan

Age hasn’t been good to him
It shows in his eyes
Lost being on a warm breath
Yet he is still wise
Years have past by the man like nothing at all
Day by day memories last which he is able to recall
Not there
but still here
he is almost over the wall
His clock has begun to slow
the ticking a low groan
The numbers faded, the wood tarnished
yet he still stands tall

A climate of expiration surrounds him
Always somewhere to be felt
Not seen by his eyes
or heard by his ears
But death does dwell

Fear is long gone in the mans heart
He has grown to accept the fate which he must take part
All is behind him, his life is complete
Life took his breath
yet somehow life still seems sweet"

5/5 though. I like your writing a lot.

Great poem! i really liked it!good job & keep writin

Wooooow. Apart from the typo on "pursed". Girl you had it going on with this one! I loved the title that was the bait. The rhyme worked like charm on me - this amazes me on so many levels. And I am not just saying it you have conjured up such meaningful images from something as simplistic as a doll. This is far far out.....I am in shock.....I have read it 3 times and it gets better any time.

Wondermazing! Please continue to spoil us with your genius poems...

[lost_laureate - come find me]

Great Poem!! Your a very talented writer!!! Great choice in words!! The flow and rhyme were outstanding!! 5/5!!

Great...i'm speechless...5/5

Very nice poem. I enjoyed it, it flows well, and makes sense. So..I think it was great, sad but good. ^^

Wow-this really was something. It flowed perfectly and had such a beautiful subject matter. I love it. Honest! Its ooh your descriptions, metophors and deep thought processes are very admirable

Sondos

I don't know how I could explain my feelings of this poem here...I mean its so good I am truly left speechless...my fave line is "
A time-worn doll filled with love
A dust imprisoned angel sent from above"
its just so deep adn touching...{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

+.+ Lol. It took me a while to get it, but as soon as you said the doll at the end I got it. Lol. I'm a bit slow ;) 5/5 +.+

Awesome poem u have a real talent 5/5

This is really well written I thought it made a lot of sense. The flow and structure was well done. A very good read in deed. :]