This was awesome. The ending was the best I think. && Thanks for commenting my poem =]
Overall I think this was pretty good. Do you have chords for it?

`taleee xx

I appreciate this so much. umm, ive been thinkin about runnin it in drop D but still not sure cause ive been working on bass lines for other songs and this is the most difficult ive written but the funnest cause it flowed so easy and it hits deep so when i get it going you will know

You are very talented jeremy. You put alot of emotions into ur writings, keep it up and before you know it you will not have any second thoughts about your abilities.

You are a great writer i can feel every thing that u are saying i would love to get to talk to you some time you sound like a really awesome guy ! ! ! I have to know if you have a GIRLFRIEND ? ? ?

I really like this one.....Great job....I look forward too seeing more great work from you
Much love
Danielle

I think it is awesome. i hope you don't leave the poetry club. keep up the good work

Alot of expression & emotion in this! keep writing you're really talented! katie