by XxXcrystalXcontagiousXxX May 11, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
If you were here i would say all the words that i had left unspoken.The day you said good bye i said i hope you choke on your words and with a sigh i thought to myself you will come back but looking back i wish i had tried.But if you were i would let the words just spill out as if i was singing a song i would scream out why did you go i should have said no wont you come back would you even care but if you were here i would dare just one last time to tell you what i feel inside but theres no chance your with her now so i just take one last glance and as i sit and cry i know i have lost my chance. |
by Sweet lig
Nice expressing ur emotions here and i'd love the metaphor its kinda unique and very worded feelings.. its not ur best but it was good thoughts.. 5/5 |
by Crystal Gaze
It's very emotionally deep, and an extreamly good read. But if you seperated your paragraph into stanza's and punctuation it would make for a better poem/ read. |
This is very good. i know the feeling. im going through this now... i love ur work, keep it up.. 5/5 |
by HaileyHelen
I love this poem 2 death it is on my favs!hehe |
by Birgit
This is powerfull, but I agree with the others, maybe put some stanza's in it.. =] |