Good poem!
Wel written
and very emotional!

I cant seem to understand your poems because of the lack of punctuation and rythm. there are no stanza's and it makes it harder to read.
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Indeed.. Write it in stanza format babes. You have lots of talent in you and your imagination/feelings are powerful. 4/5.

This is so beautiful and deep. you express your feelings so well and create a wonderful atmospher. your use of words and your style is really unique and captivating. a beautiful poem keep it up! xXx

This is powerfull, but I agree with the others, maybe put some stanza's in it.. =]
4/5

I love this poem 2 death it is on my favs!hehe

This is very good. i know the feeling. im going through this now... i love ur work, keep it up.. 5/5

It's very emotionally deep, and an extreamly good read. But if you seperated your paragraph into stanza's and punctuation it would make for a better poem/ read.
You have a talent,so help it.
Elaine

Nice expressing ur emotions here and i'd love the metaphor its kinda unique and very worded feelings.. its not ur best but it was good thoughts.. 5/5