It is really good and really sad

Your poem needs more detail. good start though.

You need a more lush variety of words, and a little more rythem would rock it out. ;) Just trying to help hun

That poem is very sad! Yet a lot of people go through it!

I Hope you do not think of commiting suicide as quite alot o your poems are about it, Take care hun Sarah x

Your poem says so much in so few words. It is amazing how that happens isn't it? Take care!!~*~Erika~*~

It is realli good..sad but good..5/5

-manda

also thanks for comment on my poem 'voices'

I dont see why people down voted you. i thought it was interesting and going with the flow.. not bad and i give you A 5 .

As it was already said if you look for more words, it would be a great poem, it is a good start and i know you got what it takes to make a wonderful poem.

This is a really sad one but great...keep up the good work

Great job girl same comment as the teacher with one of ur other poems huh needs more detail.. to me it is great less means more sometimes

Jenna

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