Its so sad, but brill. put hun, I hope your alright =] i really liked this:

My heart is no longer whole
And pain is what my life's about

its simple but something many can relate to =]

Jenn

ps: thankyou for your comment =]

I really enjoyed reading this...Ummm...the rhyme was forced to me sometimes...but it was still a great poem....Nice job...
Emma 5/5

Wow i LOVED this stanza

Darkness consumes my soul
As I keep trying to block you out
My heart is no longer whole
And pain is what my life's about

it was so straight forward, and so nicely written, and i can relate so well i loved it , it also had a really nice flow keep it up 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Aww sweetie you really shouldn't keep it all up inside because you might just explode!!LOL but i guess you did let it out when you wrote this. Another amazing job and I'm adding you to my favorites right now!!!!I lOve your poetry...

Dear, another beautiful sad penned, great write with your beautiful expressive emotions, keep them coming coz it will help you, be safe.
thanks for your beautiful comment, i very appreciated, bert.

I love the title... great poem!!! you got talent man

A very good poem of a story I know far to well it hurts so bad to see them and know their not with you any more and that you don't make them happy anymore, that is a horrible pain to bear

Aww.. so sadd.. that was wonderfully written! keep up the excellent work! 5/5
jessy xox

These poems were all so very sad. I hope things get better for you. I'm going through a tough time as well. It's so hard to pull ourselves out of that hole. Don't worry, we'll be out and enjoying life soon. Take care, and great poetry you have here :)

All full of true emotion and reflect your current mood. It's always good to write how you feel, it usually helps you feel better.

A good write again. You truly do write emotive poems that touch the reader deeply. You had some good choice of words in this one.
Only suggestion is I think the last line of the second stanza would sound better with out the "was."
Good job!

Once again, a good good poem

That's a great poem. i really enjoyed it. you spoke everything I'm feeling right now.....it's so hard!

Pepa

Once again, good format, good rhyming. all together, a good peom. again, surely something that every one has experienced in their life, giving them something to relate to on their own. level. you're an amazing writer, keep it up... 5/5

Great peice, well written thoughout with some very powerful expressions and good word choice.

5/5

You should smile more if this is true. It was good but too me it could have gone into more emotional detail instead of just telling us. But it was a really well written poem with good power and a lot of sadness which is key for writing a real sad poem.