by Unrequited May 13, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Through this life, i see cold stars in your eyes. i can feel your poison sting my insides. in your eyes, i see all hope fade... away. into the midst, we are nothing. |
Sounds like it could be a song or something like that. For a poem the flow did have some flaws but loved the words and wording and how great the imagery was. It described things so well. Nice job for that. The ending was really, exceptionally strong. |
by Jessica
This was good.. the descriptions were really powerful and you used great words to describe them! but the flow was a little off again.. |