Love you and Thank-You

Hey jonan great poem...lol

I think t his one is really nice..good job..and yes all of the things in my poem are true believe it or not

Eh... You don't want my thoughts on this one.

It's really good I liked it alot

Jonathan, this was a good attempt for the first poem on your list. It was somewhat emotive and well expressed. Although, I am not too keen on the structure of the poem. You are not fully creating an atmosphere; rather, you are taking it a step by step approach; which in some cases is OK. For improvement: Try and build a story to the poem, that way the reader is fully concentrating on each individual thought you express.
Overall, well done and keep writing =]

Much love and God bless,
Fallen.

P.S: I think you listen to a LOT of Linkin Park. I'd try and stay away from certain lyrics. =]