This was really good. So sad though. I liked how you kept repeating that same line. Really brought out the message. Awesome job! 5/5

`taleee xx

Oof! Kimi doll! That was..Fantastic.
I l.o.v.e.d the idea! Makes me think. But seriously, great poem all in all!
By the by ; Write more!

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I really thought that the repitition was very strong and useful in this poem, it served to develop a powerful rhythm, and the rhyme was good as well. This is a really good one.

Wow!!! that was really truly amazing, i absolutely loved it, your word usage fit perfectly!! Good job babe!

Wow.. this was excellent! the flow was good, except for a few of the last lines.. and the descriptions were beautiful yet sad.. i loved the first stanza and adding it at the end really added affect..

She wishes someone cares
^ i think it should be "cared"

great write, a pleasure to read.. and brought a tear to my eye.. 5/5

Wow, this is a really good poem love!
You are so good at writing.
Here's 5\5.
=D

Kaytie
xxxxx

Loved it :) i really like what ive been reading in your section.....thanks

I suppose that I relate to this poem, which is what makes it so powerful. I liked it, I think because you used some very original wording. :-)

//T.L.//