This is really sad.. You put so many emotions in this & the flow & rhythm of it was really good. I'm really sorry about what all is going on with your step dad. It always helps to talk about it. Great job on this & I hope everything is ok.

Very sad yet somewhat minimalistic I want to know more about the relationship between the girl and her father, what other emotions besides the obvious are behind these tears. Still very sad....develop the ideas further and I'll be reaching for the kleenex

[lost_laureate - come find me]

Aww.. wow, that was very good! i hope its not true, but i cant b too sure as it is so well written! keep it up!
jessy xox

Awwwww nice poem. soooo sad.. i really hope it never happened to you 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Aw how sad, if its tru i am sry:(. gr8 poem tho, tuns of emotion and detail. 5/5
~*Who Cares?*~

Hey linz, you need to work on your rythm a bit but other then that you're doing great. I look forward to reading more poems of yours

BTW
Somebody hacked my e-mail addy so I had to get a new one so sorry if I didn't reply to any of your new messages lata

Mia

Well well, long time no see...rythm is a little off but I like it it's real good, 5/5 keep it up yo peace.
~-H-Townz Finest-~

Hmm..very diffrent, in the flow and rythym that is. I liked it though. I thought it was nicely exicuted. :)

W.O.W

A very good piece here. Lots and lots of emotion. Just the way I like it. Although I do hope this isn't based on anything true. Keep up the great work! 5/5

`Taleee xx

Omg girl is this true?? well i can rly relate so i like it 5/5 and if its true then im sry he hit you

YHAH!!!!!!!!!ROCK ON!!!!!!!!!!