No One Knew

Hey I reworded a poem & set another one up different plus I added a couple.
Check out this site if you want to see them all
www.xanga.com/shattered_soul89
;) see ya girl, we'll make some plans to hang out this summer. Once I start making some money Ill take us all out to eat or something
--"summer" (im writing under this name now)

Good write. My suggestion is to work on that last sentence of the last stanza a bit more... it's so abrupt that it doesn't seem right. The other thing that I will suggest is to make a bolder impact by breaking the start of the last stanza like this:

She took the wrong way out you see without a doubt

Good write though. Keep up the good work! 5/5

I love the ending to this poem, I didn't expect it to turn out like that. Many people will be able to relate to this, and that's probably the most important factor in a poem. Good job.