Nothing On Me

This is both sad and happy. I like it. Good job, and yes you can use that line in one of your poems if you want. :]

Interesting way of writing. I liked the way is was a narrative inside a narrative, the way you commented on your own writing. I thought that was quite funny and you could have gotten away with using it more.

Although those bits were quite funny, It was still easy to see the underlying emotion/s the sadness and longing, which we all experience in unrequiting love.

My only issue would be your use of punctuation, the full stops made the poem fragmented and interrupted which was quite annoying while I was reading, as I wanted to get completely into the piece. I think it would be better if you took them out, and the effect would not be lost as you have used spaces between lines as well.

You took the feelings and wrote well about them, I think removing the punctuation would make all the difference.

Keep writing and improving, katie!
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I like the theme of romeo and juliet. It's clever and i really like it. You have such good poems and a large variety. Keep up the good work. =]

I know what you're talking about, and I guess I'm a little biased cuz I know everything you're talking about from your experiances, but still a great poem and a fun read.

Ravyn