Good peice, the expression is very strong, and though the structure could be improved the content is fantastic and makes up for this a greta deal.

This was kinda sad. Good though. But in that last line you have. I think it would work better if you said "Love always fcuks with me" I dunno.. It just didnt sound right the way it was. But it was still a cool poem. 5/5

`taleee xx

Hey. i thought your poem was great. keep writting

"screw this shit -
I'm love, I'm too busy for these kids"

Was there suppose to be an 'in' after "I'm" ? I thought it made more sense that way. I disagree with this poem, but I like reading different views. Another thing I didn't like, was the hero dies in the end, because I've read it too many times, and have used it myself. I just got bored of it : P
But otherwise, it's another great poem :)

Great poem!! This is so true. no matter how much people try to deny it.